Baseball is my first thought reading it. Almost could invision the Mariners stadium. The hush, the tilting on their seats, and coach biting his nails. I may be way off, but that's what I percieved. I loved it.
Hi, Kevin. I really like the second line. Somehow moving from "one strike" to a comma and then to "joy" and a line break makes "joy" feel like an exclamation. As "one strike" sounds dangerous, it's almost like the joy defeats the danger for now. If the word "play" is literal, this could be a game where success means you get to keep playing, maybe baseball, as Amanda has said. If the word "play" is symbolic, this could be a situation in which the persona has escaped real physical disaster. I almost picture a loved one miraculously recovering from a deadly illness. Nancy
Baseball is my first thought reading it. Almost could invision the Mariners stadium. The hush, the tilting on their seats, and coach biting his nails. I may be way off, but that's what I percieved. I loved it.
ReplyDeleteHi, Kevin. I really like the second line. Somehow moving from "one strike" to a comma and then to "joy" and a line break makes "joy" feel like an exclamation. As "one strike" sounds dangerous, it's almost like the joy defeats the danger for now. If the word "play" is literal, this could be a game where success means you get to keep playing, maybe baseball, as Amanda has said. If the word "play" is symbolic, this could be a situation in which the persona has escaped real physical disaster. I almost picture a loved one miraculously recovering from a deadly illness. Nancy
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